What Kurt Vonnegut’s “Slaughterhouse-Five” Tells Us Now


June 13, 2019

I first read “Slaughterhouse-Five” in 1972, three years after it was published and three years before I published my own first novel. I was twenty-five years old. 1972 was the year of inching slowly toward the Paris Peace Accords, which were supposed to end the war in Vietnam, though the final, ignominious American withdrawal—the helicopters airlifting people from the roof of the American Embassy in Saigon—would not take place until three years later, at which point, by way of a small footnote to history, I had become a published writer.

I mention Vietnam because, although “Slaughterhouse-Five” is a book about the Second World War, Vietnam is also a presence in its pages, and people’s feelings about Vietnam have a good deal to do with the novel’s huge success. Eight years earlier, in 1961, Joseph Heller had published “Catch-22” and President John F. Kennedy began the escalation of the United States’ involvement in the conflict in Vietnam. “Catch-22,” like “Slaughterhouse-Five,” was a novel about the Second World War that caught the imagination of readers who were thinking a lot about another war. In those days, I was living in Britain, which did not send soldiers to fight in Indochina but whose government did support the American war effort, and so, when I was at university, and afterward, I, too, was involved with thinking about and protesting against that war. I did not read “Catch-22” in 1961, because I was only fourteen years old. As a matter of fact, I read both “Slaughterhouse-Five” and “Catch-22” in the same year, a decade later, and the two books together had a great effect on my young mind.

It hadn’t occurred to me until I read them that antiwar novels could be funny as well as serious. “Catch-22” is crazy funny, slapstick funny. It sees war as insane and the desire to escape combat as the only sane position. Its tone of voice is deadpan farce. “Slaughterhouse-Five” is different. There is much comedy in it, as there was in everything Kurt Vonnegut wrote, but it does not see war as farcical. It sees war as a tragedy so great that perhaps only the mask of comedy allows one to look it in the eye. Vonnegut is a sad-faced comedian. If Heller was Charlie Chaplin, then Vonnegut was Buster Keaton. His predominant tone of voice is melancholy, the tone of voice of a man who has been present for a great horror and lived to tell the tale. The two books do, however, have this in common: they are both portraits of a world that has lost its mind, in which children are sent out to do men’s work and die.

As a prisoner of war, age twenty-two, which is to say three years younger than I was when I read his story, Vonnegut was in the famously beautiful city of Dresden, locked up with other Americans in Schlachthof-Fünf, where pigs had been slaughtered before the war, and was therefore an accidental witness to one of the greatest slaughters of human beings in history, the firebombing of Dresden, in February of 1945, which flattened the whole city and killed almost everyone in it.

So it goes.

I had not remembered, until I reread “Slaughterhouse-Five,” that that famous phrase “So it goes” is used only and always as a comment on death. Sometimes a phrase from a novel or a play or a film can catch the imagination so powerfully—even when misquoted—that it lifts off from the page and acquires an independent life of its own. “Come up and see me sometime” and “Play it again, Sam” are misquotations of this type. Something of this sort has also happened to the phrase “So it goes.” The trouble is that when this kind of liftoff happens to a phrase its original context is lost. I suspect that many people who have not read Vonnegut are familiar with the phrase, but they, and also, I suspect, many people who have read Vonnegut, think of it as a kind of resigned commentary on life. Life rarely turns out in the way the living hope for, and “So it goes” has become one of the ways in which we verbally shrug our shoulders and accept what life gives us. But that is not its purpose in “Slaughterhouse-Five.” “So it goes” is not a way of accepting life but, rather, of facing death. It occurs in the text almost every single time someone dies, and only when death is evoked.

It is also deeply ironic. Beneath the apparent resignation is a sadness for which there are no words. This is the manner of the entire novel, and it has led to the novel being, in many cases, misunderstood. I am not suggesting that “Slaughterhouse-Five” has been poorly treated. Its reception was largely positive, it has sold an enormous number of copies, the Modern Library ranked it eighteenth on its list of the hundred best English-language novels of the twentieth century, and it is also on a similar list issued by Time magazine. However, there are those who have accused it of the sin of “quietism,” of a resigned acceptance, even, according to Anthony Burgess, an “evasion” of the worst things in the world. One of the reasons for this is the phrase “So it goes,” and it is clear to me from these critiques that the British novelist Julian Barnes wasright when he wrote in his book “A History of the World in 10 ½ Chapters” that “Irony may be defined as what people miss.”

Kurt Vonnegut is a deeply ironic writer who has sometimes been read as if he were not. The misreading goes beyond “So it goes,” and has a good deal to do with the inhabitants of the planet of Tralfamadore. As it happens, I am a great fan of Tralfamadorians, who look like toilet plungers, beginning with their mechanical emissary Salo, who, in an earlier Vonnegut novel, “The Sirens of Titan,” was marooned on Titan, a moon of the planet Saturn, needing a replacement part for his spaceship. And now comes the classic Vonnegut subject of free will, expressed as a comic science-fiction device. We learn in “The Sirens of Titan” that human history has been manipulated by Tralfamadorians to persuade the human race to build large messages to Salo, and to get our primitive ancestors to develop a civilization capable of doing so. Stonehenge and the Great Wall of China were some of the messages from Tralfamadore. Stonehenge read, “Replacement part being rushed with all possible speed.” The Great Wall of China said, “Be patient. We haven’t forgotten about you.” The Kremlin meant “You will be on your way before you know it.” And the Palace of the League of Nations, in Geneva, meant “Pack up your things and be ready to leave on short notice.”

Tralfamadorians, we learn in “Slaughterhouse-Five,” perceive time differently. They see that the past, present, and future all exist simultaneously and forever and are simply there, fixed, eternally. When the main character of the novel, Billy Pilgrim, who is kidnapped and taken to Tralfamadore, “comes unstuck in time” and begins to experience chronology the way Tralfamadorians do, he understands why his captors find comical the notion of free will.

It seems obvious, at least to this reader, that there is a mischievous ironic intelligence at work here, that there is no reason for us to assume that the rejection of free will by aliens resembling toilet plungers is a rejection also made by their creator. It is perfectly possible, perhaps even sensible, to read Billy Pilgrim’s entire Tralfamadorian experience as a fantastic, traumatic disorder brought about by his wartime experiences—as “not real.” Vonnegut leaves that question open, as a good writer should. That openness is the space in which the reader is allowed to make up his or her own mind.

To read Vonnegut is to know that he was repeatedly drawn to the investigation of free will, of what it might be and how it might or might not function, and that he came at the subject from many different angles. Many of his ruminations were presented in the form of works by his fictional alter ego, Kilgore Trout.

I love Kilgore Trout as deeply as I love the inhabitants of the planet Tralfamadore. I even own a copy of the novel “Venus on the Half-Shell,” in which the writer Philip José Farmer took a Trout story written by Vonnegut and expanded it to novel length. “Venus on the Half-Shell” is about the accidental destruction of the earth by incompetent universal bureaucrats, and the attempt by the sole surviving human being to seek answers to the so-called Ultimate Question. In this way, Kilgore Trout inspired Douglas Adams’s celebrated book “The Hitchhiker’s Guide to the Galaxy,” in which, you may recall, the earth was demolished by Vogons to make room for an interstellar bypass, and the sole surviving man, Arthur Dent, went in search of answers. Finally, the supercomputer Deep Thought revealed that the answer to life, the universe, and everything was, and is, “42.” The problem remains: What is the question?

In Vonnegut’s novel “Breakfast of Champions,” we learn about another Kilgore Trout story, “Now It Can Be Told,” written in the form of a letter from the Creator of the Universe addressed to the reader of the story. The Creator explains that the whole of life itself has been a long experiment. The nature of the experiment was this: to introduce into an otherwise wholly deterministic universe one single person who is granted free will, to see what use he makes of it, in a reality in which every other living thing was, is, and always will be a programmed machine. Everyone in the whole of history has been a robot, and the single individual with free will’s mother and father and everyone he knows are also robots, and so, by the way, is Sammy Davis, Jr. The individual with free will, God explains, is you, the reader of the story, and so God would like to offer you an apology for any discomfort you have endured. The end.

It’s worth adding one further detail. Throughout the many works by Kurt Vonnegut in which Kilgore Trout appears, he is consistently described as the worst writer in the world, whose books are utter failures, and who is completely and even contemptuously ignored. We are asked to see him simultaneously as a genius and a fool. This is not accidental. His creator, Kurt Vonnegut, was at once the most intellectual of playful fantasists and the most playfully fantastic of intellectuals. He had a horror of people who took things too seriously and was simultaneously obsessed with the consideration of the most serious things, things both philosophical (like free will) and lethal (like the firebombing of Dresden). This is the paradox out of which his dark ironies grow. Nobody who futzed around so often and in so many ways with the idea of free will, or who cared so profoundly about the dead, could be described as a fatalist, or a quietist, or resigned. His books argue about ideas of freedom and mourn the dead, from their first pages to their last.

Around the same time that I first read “Slaughterhouse-Five” and “Catch-22,” I also read another novel about a similar subject. That novel was “War and Peace,” which is longer than Heller’s book and Vonnegut’s book combined and isn’t funny at all. On that first reading of Tolstoy’s masterpiece, my twenty-five-year-old self thought, in summary: Loved peace, hated war. I was absorbed by the stories of Natasha Rostov, Prince Andrei, and Pierre Bezukhov, and found the extremely long descriptions of fighting, especially of the Battle of Borodino, pretty boring, to be frank. When I reread “War and Peace” perhaps thirty years later, I discovered that I felt exactly the opposite. The description of men at war, I thought, had never been bettered, and the greatness of the novel was to be found in those descriptions, and not in the somewhat more conventional stories of the leading characters. Loved war, hated peace.

Rereading “Slaughterhouse-Five,” I also found my valuation of the text changing. That younger self was strongly drawn to fantasy and science fiction, and sought out magazines called things like Galaxyand Astounding and Amazing, and was drawn to the work not only of the crossover giants, like Kurt Vonnegut and Ray Bradbury and Isaac Asimov and Ursula K. Le Guin and Arthur C. Clarke, but also to Mary Shelley and Virginia Woolf, whose “Frankenstein” and “Orlando,” respectively, are honorary members of the canon, as well as to the hardcore genre masters, such as James Blish, Frederik Pohl, C. M. Kornbluth, Clifford D. Simak, Katherine MacLean, Zenna Henderson, and L. Sprague de Camp. That young man, faced with Vonnegut’s masterpiece, responded most strongly to the sci-fi aspects of the book. To read it again has been to discover the humane beauty of the non-sci-fi parts, which make up most of the book.

The truth is that “Slaughterhouse-Five” is a great realist novel. Its first sentence is “All this happened, more or less.” In that nonfictional first chapter, Vonnegut tells us how hard the book was to write, how hard it was for him to deal with war. He tells us that his characters were real people, though he has changed all the names. “One guy I knew really was shot in Dresden for taking a teapot that wasn’t his. Another guy I knew really did threaten to have his personal enemies killed by hired gunmen after the war.” And later, when his characters, the ones with the changed names, arrive at Schlachthof-Fünf—Slaughterhouse Five, whose name he has not changed—he reminds us that he’s there with them, suffering right along with them:

Billy looked inside the latrine. The wailing was coming from in there . . . an American near Billy wailed that he had excreted everything but his brains. Moments later he said, “There they go, there they go.” He meant his brains.

That was I. That was me. That was the author of this book.

At one point Vonnegut quotes a conversation he had with a filmmaker called Harrison Starr, who would achieve a kind of modest renown as the executive producer of Michelangelo Antonioni’s movie about American hippies, “Zabriskie Point,” which was a huge commercial flop.

[Harrison Starr] raised his eyebrows and inquired, “Is it an anti-war book?”

“Yes,” I said. “I guess.”

“You know what I say to people when I hear they’re writing anti-war books?”

“No. What do you say, Harrison Starr?”

“I say, why don’t you write an anti-glacier book instead?”

What he meant, of course, was that there would always be wars, that they were as easy to stop as glaciers. I believe that, too.

Vonnegut’s novel is about that, about the inevitability of human violence, and about what it does to the not particularly violent human beings who get caught up in it. He knows that most human beings are not particularly violent. Or not more violent than children are. Give a child a machine gun, and he may well use it. Which does not mean that children are particularly violent.

The Second World War, as Vonnegut reminds us, was a children’s crusade.

Billy Pilgrim is an adult to whom Vonnegut gives the innocence of a child. He is not particularly violent. He does nothing awful in the war or in his prewar or postwar life, or in his life on the planet Tralfamadore. He seems deranged, and is mostly thought of as crazy, or as a near-simpleton. But he has a characteristic in common with many of the characters Vonnegut wrote throughout his career, and it is this characteristic that allows us to care for him, and therefore to feel the horror that he feels.

Billy Pilgrim is lovable.

If he were not lovable, the book would be unbearable. One of the great questions that faces all writers who have to deal with atrocity is, is it possible to do it? Are there things so powerful, so dreadful, that they are beyond the power of literature to describe? Every writer who faced the challenge of writing about the Second World War—and the Vietnam War, in fact—has had to think about that question. All of them decided they needed to come at the atrocity at an angle, so to speak, not to face it head on, because to do that would be unbearable.

Günter Grass, in “The Tin Drum,” used surrealism as his angle of entry. His character Oskar Matzerath, who stops growing because he can’t face the adult reality of his time, is one kind of fabulist being that allows the author to enter the horror. And little Oskar with his tin drum, drumming the beats of history, is, like Billy Pilgrim who has come unstuck in time, lovable. He is also, as the first sentence of “The Tin Drum” tells us, an inmate in a lunatic asylum. From opposite sides, German and American, these two deranged child-men give us our finest portraits of the great derangement of their time. Vonnegut, like Grass, combines the surrealism that has become the reality of his characters’ time with a detached, almost stunned tenderness that makes the reader feel fondly toward them, even as they stumble incompetently through life.

It may be impossible to stop wars, just as it’s impossible to stop glaciers, but it’s still worth finding the form and the language that reminds us what they are and calls them by their true names. That is what realism is.

“Slaughterhouse-Five” is also a novel humane enough to allow, at the end of the horror that is its subject, for the possibility of hope. Its final passage describes the end of the war and the liberation of the prisoners, who include Billy Pilgrim and Vonnegut himself. “And somewhere in there it was springtime,” Vonnegut writes, and in the last moment of the book, birds, once again, begin to sing. This cheerfulness in spite of everything is Vonnegut’s characteristic note. It may be, as I’ve suggested, a cheerfulness beneath which much pain is hidden. But it is cheerfulness nonetheless. Vonnegut’s prose, even when dealing with the dreadful, whistles a happy tune.

Fifty years after its first publication, seventy-four years after Kurt Vonnegut was inside Slaughterhouse-Five during the firebombing of Dresden, what does his great novel have to say to us?

It doesn’t tell us how to stop wars.

It tells us that wars are hell, but we knew that already.

It tells us that most human beings are not so bad, except for the ones who are, and that’s valuable information. It tells us that human nature is the one great constant of life on earth, and it beautifully and truthfully shows us human nature neither at its best nor at its worst but how it mostly is, most of the time, even when the times are terrible.

It doesn’t tell us how to get to the planet Tralfamadore, but it does tell us how to communicate with its inhabitants. All we have to do is build something big, like the Pyramids or the Great Wall of China. Maybe the wall that some individual whom I will not name is planning to build between the United States and Mexico will be read as an urgent message on Tralfamadore. The person who wants to build the wall will not know what the message means, of course. He is a pawn, being manipulated by a power greater than his to send the message in this time of great emergency.

I hope the message reads, “Help.”

This piece was adapted from a lecture delivered in April, in Indianapolis, to mark the fiftieth anniversary of “Slaughterhouse-Five.”

5 books that will help advance your career

5 books that will help advance your career Time management is so 2010. The new game in town? Attention management. By Julie D. Andrews, LearnVest | May 22, 2014

Read your way to the top.
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No matter which rung you occupy on the corporate ladder, there’s always farther to climb — more skills to sharpen, bosses to impress, raises to earn.

In the never-ending quest for professional improvement, you may find accelerated success by enrolling in workshops, picking the brain of your favorite mentor — or simply devouring an insightful, strategy-packed career book.

But how do you know which tomes are truly helpful and worth your time?

Enter: LearnVest. We read five career page-turners for you, chatted with the authors, and mined the best tips you can apply to your own career strategy — starting today.

1. The book: The Up Side of Down: Why Failing Well Is the Key to Success
By Megan McArdle

According to Bloomberg View columnist Megan McArdle, failure has significant power to lead us to success — if you know how to harness it. Citing business, economic, and psychological research, she argues that the professional skill we should all be cultivating is the art of bouncing back.

McArdle’s big tip: Relinquish your fear of failure.

What that means: When we expect that professional failures can — and will — occur, we give ourselves permission to take a leap or two. And if a soul-crushing failure strikes as a result, you can skip the shock-paralysis mode — because you were already expecting a few bumps in the road — and quickly change your course.

So diagnose and assess failures early, then accept them — and move on. “Realize you are not a failure — you are a person who has failed,” McArdle says. “Failure is how we learn and can set us up for the next achievement.”

Her advice in action: Even some of the most recognizable, successful people floundered before they ultimately got it right. And while you may not ever experience large-scale failure, the takeaway is the same. So next time you hit a professional snag — you miss a deadline, bomb the presentation, or are late to an important shareholder meeting — allow yourself to feel bad for just a minute … then spring into action: Take responsibility for your mistake, come up with a recovery plan — and then use the experience as fuel for your future successes.

2. The book: How to be a Productivity Ninja: Worry Less, Achieve More and Love What You Do
By Graham Allcott

Go-getters, listen up: Time management is so 2010. The new game in town? Attention management.

That’s according to Graham Allcott, founder of Think Productive, a training firm in the U.K. that has advised staffers at companies ranging from eBay and Heineken to GlaxoSmithKline on how to fine-tune productivity at every corporate level.

Here’s the gist: With so many trifling tasks grasping for our attention during the typical workday, it’s easy to lose sight of the macro view of your career. Allcott’s principles aim to help professionals refocus on the bigger picture in order to master key projects that’ll lead them to greater achievement.

Allcott’s big tip: Go off the grid.

What that means: One of his signature strategies outlined in the book is called “stealth and camouflage.” Basically, Allcott says, the best way to be more productive at work is to dip under the radar.

“Be willing to disconnect from phone, email, text, social media, even your office environment, when there’s a bigger goal in sight that you want to achieve,” Allcott says.

His advice in action: We know what you’re thinking: much easier said than done.

But Allcott isn’t suggesting you complete your important work projects in a remote cabin in the woods with no cell-phone service or access to Facebook. Instead, make a conscious effort to protect your attention span by actively fighting typical office distractions.

For example, send phone calls to voice mail when they’re likely to be less important than the task you’re working on, set strict boundaries for signing off email, social media, or instant messenger programs when you’re under the gun, and book time on your own calendar for creative thinking, forward planning, and review. (Allcott also suggests making your calendar settings private, as more persistent coworkers may try to schedule over meetings called “personal thinking time.”)

If you have a little flexibility, spend time working away from your desk when you can — at home, in cafés, in a meeting room, or outside. You’ll be less tempted to devote time to putting out little fires that occur throughout the day — and more productive on the projects most likely to get you noticed.

3. The book: Body of Work: Finding the Thread That Ties Your Story Together
By Pamela Slim

Veteran business coach Pamela Slim says there’s no such thing as a textbook career trajectory anymore. Increasingly, many of us are following more unconventional routes — an amalgam of corporate posts, start-up work, freelance projects, and even side gigs.

“Work is inherently unstable nowadays, and it’s not going back to the way it was,” Slim says. “We need a new way to think about careers.”

Slim’s solution? Craft a narrative that weaves together your diverse skill set and varied successes — an explanation of who you are and what you can do.

Slim’s big tip: Think back on your career accomplishments and identify what common threads tie them together.

What that means: This, Slim says, is your body of work — and your ability to craft a powerful one is what will ultimately determine your ongoing employability.

“[You’ll find work now] because you have clarity on where you’ve been and where you’re going. The story component is key. You need to drive the story, set context and constantly reposition yourself,” she says.

Her advice in action: Are you looking to take a career leap, but aren’t sure what next step complements your body of work? Slim says to start by “naming your ingredients” — and make sure they’re integrated into your work.

That’s exactly what David Batstone, a sustainable business professor, journalist, and business investor in San Francisco, did. After reading a news story where he learned the owner of his favorite Indian restaurant was involved in a human-trafficking ring, Batstone, a longtime human-rights activist, was inspired to combine his varied career paths into a single focal point.

Using his “ingredients” — his roles as a journalist, investor, professor, activist, father, and husband, plus his other related skills and values — Batstone co-founded Not for Sale, a nonprofit that fights human slavery.

“For Batstone, it was having multiple, disparate dots to bring together that allowed him to discover and clobber his next big project — the cumulative one that would make the most impactful, positive changes to date in his professional life,” Slim says.

4. The book: Springboard: Launching Your Personal Search for Success
By G. Richard Shell

G. Richard Shell, a Wharton professor and creator of the popular course, “The Literature of Success: Historical and Ethical Perspectives,” wants you to know one thing: The formula for success is not one-size-fits-all.

This may seem like an unlikely stance, considering he teaches at one of the most prestigious business schools in the country. But Shell argues that taking your time to define what success means to you, personally, will ultimately lead to more fulfillment, happiness, and, yes, success.

Shell’s big tip: Follow your capabilities, or the things you do “a bit better than others.”

What that means: Approach your career from the inside out — considering who you are, fundamentally, when making professional decisions.

Understanding what motivates you and what you like to do will help you better weed out corporate climates, cultures, and job descriptions that aren’t a fit — and won’t bring you happiness. Then you can focus on aligning your job prospects with the work and environments where you’ll contribute and achieve the most satisfaction.

After all, if you don’t do this for yourself, no one else will either.

“School teaches skills whether students are good at them or not,” Shell says, likening it to a one-size-fits-all culinary experience where little attention is given to what type of cuisine you should cook. “So you end up with many dissatisfied workers who think they made the wrong career choice.”

His advice in action: Not sure what’s in your basket of capabilities? Shell suggests tuning into what tasks and projects give you the greatest sense of gratification on completion — activities you gravitate toward because they’re interesting and enjoyable.

Julia Child, widely recognized as the first celebrity chef, summed it up perfectly when she said: “The more I cook, the more I like to cook.”

Consider what you like to do a little more each time you do it — and do it.

5. The book: Get a Job!: How I Found a Job When Jobs Are Hard to Find — and So Can You
By Dan Quillen

When Dan Quillen was laid off in 2011, he called on his H.R. background to help him land an interview for every four résumés he submitted — a response rate that was 19 percent higher than peers’ in his networking groups.

How’d he do it? Hint: Social-media savvy played a big role in getting his résumé more visibility. Among the lessons in his book, Quillen details why using social media is an organic, far-reaching, and imperative strategy to nabbing the job you want.

Quillen’s big tip: Social channels are a must for job searches (unless you have time to waste).

What that means: It can be embarrassing to admit you’re job hunting — especially if it’s the result of a layoff. But the sooner and faster you get the word out that your services are available for hire, the better.

Advice in action: Broadcast as widely as possible that you’re looking for a new position. Use LinkedIn, Facebook, Twitter — any and all social networks that make sense for you — to cast your social-networking net wide, Quillen says.

Join groups, from college alumni to those of current or past employees at companies where you’d like to work — and participate actively. This provides an opportunity to expand your networking beyond those who are geographically close enough for you to meet with in person.

“You never know what corner of the social-networking universe may hide your dream job and who may spread the word about it,” says Quillen.

And if a case of embarrassment strikes, recall: Most employees receive a referral bonus for bringing in solid candidates — and that’d be you.

This story was originally published on LearnVest. LearnVest is a program for your money. Read their stories and use their tools at LearnVest.com.

Guest Post – What Drives You to Buy Independent?

OCTOBER 7, 2014 BY LINDAGHILL

With the abundance of self-publishing that’s going on these days, much of what we run into when browsing through e-books are novels written by independent authors–writers without traditional publishers. Being that it’s relatively easy to upload your own shiny new novel to Kindle and Kobo, and it’s potentially a free enterprise, everyone and his mother are doing it, with or without the talent to back them up. The quality of said self-published works is a fairly hot topic, but not one I want to discuss today. (Been there, done that, wrote the blog post.)

My question today is a little more simple: what is it that compels you to buy an independently published book? Is it the normally $2.99 or less price tag? Or is it something more friendly?

With so many self-published authors blogging on sites like WordPress, everyone has the opportunity to get to know his or her favourite writer on a more personal level than ever before. The way I see it, this is a bonus for everyone involved. Not only do the readers get to see, potentially, what inspires the characters and places they enjoy, but for the writer I believe it supplies the opportunity to sell more books. Getting to know an author as a person and not just the shadow behind the words we love to read is a treat. If you haven’t looked them up by way of the website they provide in their novels, do! It’s a situation that just doesn’t happen with writers like Stephen King and Danielle Steele. They might give up a little of their personal lives, but not enough that we can relate to them or get to know them as real people.

Do you “know” any independent authors – and has knowing them compelled you to buy their books? Is it the price tag? Is it to support the little guy in the big world of publishing? Or is it something else altogether that drives you to buy independent? Please, share your experience!

Linda

http://lindaghill.com/

Solving the Riddle of Discoverability

Brooke Kinley Adventures
Journalist. Adventurer. Sister. Outdoorswoman.

Solving the Riddle of Discoverability

by AS Bond

As a new self published author, I quickly realized that the main challenge facing me in selling my books is ‘discoverability’. Or, in other words, making your book stand out and be seen; a particularly difficult task when you don’t have a major publisher getting reviews on your behalf in national newspapers, or buying window space in Waterstones. That’s where BooksGoSocial.com helped me, but it’s a part of a very big puzzle. Book marketing for yourself is a time consuming, difficult and even creatively challenging, but ultimately of course, very rewarding.

Patriot, A Brooke Kinley Adventure is my first self published novel, I was surprised at just how much hard work is involved! I’m not even talking about writing it; that’s a whole other blog post! I approached publishing Patriot as professionally as any publishing company and just managing the entire process was a full time job for several months. First, I had to research all the options for self publishing, right down to the minutiae of ISBN numbers, distribution options etc. This took two months. Then, I had to organize the editing, the formatting, the jacket design, the publishing (print and ebook) as well as my own business administration.

Yet it is the marketing that has been the real challenge. Like many authors, I’m focused on actually writing books. That’s the bit I enjoy, the thing I’m pretty good at (and I’ve been doing it for publishers both global and regional, as well as self publishing for almost two decades now). So, when it came to getting word out about my first novel, I was left wondering; where to start?

With my traditional background – and a few handy contacts from my career as a freelance journalist – I began with the solid stuff; press releases to relevant publications, asking for reviews, offering articles on related topics, that sort of thing. First lesson learned; start early. I mean really early, like 3 months before publication. That’s a difficult thing for self published writers to get to grips with, as you need a supply of print galleys and a digital version to get any big print publications to even look at your work. Plus, that’s assuming you ‘forget’ to mention it’s self published and you have a demonstrable track record and/or a killer hook to get their interest in the first place. How many self published authors have the book ready to go three months before publication? Well, if you want your novel considered by a national women’s magazine, or a big player like Fresh Fiction in the USA, you have to hold back and show some patience. It may pay dividends!

Many self publishers have tiny or non-existent budgets and depend on social media to market their books. This was a real learning curve for me, and I’m still travelling. Twitter (great), Facebook (variable), website (essential) and a blog (definitely essential) all work together, but you need more. Sign up to book discussion and recommendation websites, such as Goodreads.com, engage with other writers and readers by reviewing books, commenting on threads. There’s a world of social interaction out there and while the measurable impact of any particular part is impossible to quantify, what is clear that without it, your book will almost certainly sink without trace.

What I have also learned is to evaluate all the offers from companies for a) track record; can they do what they are claiming? b) can you do it yourself? c) can someone else do it for less? There are a lot of people out there trying to sell you market exposure. Be very careful. It would b easy, for example, to spend several thousand dollars on getting reviews by top Amazon reviewers and other types of Amazon based promotion, but it is actually free and easy to find out who are the top reviewers yourself and contact them directly. Similarly, there are many guides and books out there (some free, most at very low cost), as well as uTube videos etc on how to make Amazon work for you.

Among all this cacophony of marketers trying to sell to you, BooksGoSocial.com are really useful. They offer to showcase your first page free (‘free’ is a great twitter hashtag to get noticed) and multiple twitter accounts promoting your work, not to mention plenty of good ideas for practical, low cost marketing techniques for you, as author to put into practice straightaway. They are a great example of a low cost, high promotion tool that can really help with that thorny problem of ‘discoverability’. I did my homework before I signed up and they passed with flying colours.

What it all comes down to is putting in the time and the energy. You are learning a new skill. The best thing is, you then apply it to your own business; your books. The market is out there, so get stuck in and get your book discovered.

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TriQuarterly: Not-quite-naked

TriQuarterly
Not-quite-naked

Dinah Lenney
Craft Essay
A writer friend of mine published a story, a family drama that featured a young couple and a difficult child. When her own daughter was old enough to read, she wanted to know, not if she was the baby in the book, but if her mother’s feelings for her back then were the ones she’d written about.

And another friend includes, in every novel she writes, a man with a habit—always the same gesture, a recurring trope—that irritates his wife. And yet. In life, her husband continues to do the irritating thing. All these books later, he doesn’t seem to notice or care. But I do.

*

I like to joke that I watch what I write about my husband and children. Because I want them to love me, I say. Actually, I’ve promised I won’t write about the kids anymore. Grown up as they are, their lives are not grist for my mill: I get it, I do. Still, my daughter teases now and then. “There’ll be no more of that,” she says. It’s not that she doesn’t trust me, not exactly—but she’s reminding me, lest I lose my place. And I reassure her: “This is why I write nonfiction.” Then I explain that it’s because I mean to choose what and how much I’m willing to tell. As a writer of fiction, I’d wind up baring it all, wouldn’t I? She makes a face. “What kind of fiction writer—,” she starts to say, then stops herself. In the first place, she knows (don’t we all): great writers of great fiction draw on their lives, their experience, their real-life relationships to tell their stories. In the second, even if they don’t, they’re suspect—that is, we readers are suspicious, how not?

*

Here’s Tim Parks in a recent issue of the New York Review of Books:

The narrator of Philip Roth’s Deception, himself called Philip Roth, tells his wife: “I write fiction and I’m told it’s autobiography, I write autobiography and I’m told it’s fiction, so since I’m so dim and they’re so smart, let them decide what it is or it isn’t.” For Roth there were few taboos left to break at this point and any partner of his could consider herselfwell-warned. With other writers much may be at stake.

And here’s Roth, himself, in the New York Times Book Review, having defended his fiction for the fiction it is. “As for the kind of writer I am?” he adds. “I am who I don’t pretend to be.” (Say what?)

And—a while back, also in the Times—in a piece titled “What Is Real Is Imagined,” Colm Toibin writes: “The world that fiction comes from is fragile.” About Mann and Beckett and Wolfe, he insists:

when it came to the moment when they were putting their stories together, working out the details, mixing memory and desire, they had no qualms, no problems aboutappropriating what they pleased. They used what they needed; they changed what they used. Their soft hearts became stony.

*

Why this preoccupation with fiction, Dinah? I’m supposed to be thinking about nonfiction; about point of view, “The Naked I” (a phrase coined by Margot Singer), as it informs voice in memoir and personal essay. No question it does. I’m convinced we come to the genre to keep company with the writer, that we are at least as interested in the who as the what—as in who’s telling the story, and why and how. However. Compulsive first-person narrator that I am, I feel a confession coming on.

Because I know why we read the stuff, but why do we write it? Do we mean to get naked? As if I could speak for everyone. That I can’t is among the most important reasons for each of us to get it right on the page. And this is why, when asked to confront “the Naked I” from every angle, I’m obliged to consider: Am I willing to strip down? All the way? To show everything? Or am I not only too encumbered, too fleshy, too flawed, but also too vain? Too devoted to “voice”?

*

Recently a poet friend, asked whether or not he prescribes or follows writing rules, answered with a quote from Roethke: “If you cannot mean then at least sing.” But as I understand what we do, it’s only if the prose is singing that a writer has a chance of saying what she means. “Sense follows sound,” wrote Leonard Michaels.

And Cynthia Ozick said, “Cadence. Cadence is the footprint, isn’t it?” That she said so in one of those Paris Review interviews titled “The Art of Fiction” shouldn’t trouble me—no surprise that writers of all genres are preoccupied with voice. But who actually has to get naked to find it? How naked exactly does she have to be?

*

Here’s Francine Prose, from an anthology called Who’s Writing This: Notes on the Authorial I with Self Portraits (edited by Daniel Halpern):

I often think that she would like me to disappear.
The evidence in support of this nearly incredible theory is that she never seems happier than when she is writing, when the work takes over . . . and seems to write itself . . . What pleases her is that she isn’t there, she no longer feels herself present, and I . . .
Someone else is writing, and both she and I have vanished.

For years I was an actor—almost straight out of college I went to acting school—if you’d asked me back then why, why go to school, I might have told you that I wanted to learn, among other things, to vanish—

But to vanish inside a part? If that’s what you want to do, you have to get naked first. Moreover, it’s not enough to get naked (this is what I used to tell my own students), you have stand up naked and turn around slowly. Which is terrifying and exhilarating—and, in some ways, a lot like writing when it’s going well.

The thing is—although either way the requirement is nakedness—most wannabe actors only think they want to vanish. Some are shy, perhaps, and acting sets them free. Many, though, have been made to feel self-conscious about their intensity—as if they were too passionate, too pungent. I was one those kids, my longings outsized, my feelings turned up too high for ordinary rooms. On a stage, however, framed by the proscenium, speaking and singing (living!) resonated with appropriate significance.

*

Jem Cohen’s gorgeous film Museum Hours, which came and went in a flash last year, is the story of a friendship struck up between a tourist and a guard in the Kunsthistorisches Museum in Vienna. It’s also very much about the relationship between life and art: How do we discern one from the other? What defines the latter? What’s it for? How is it supposed to make us feel? In the film—in the museum—lots and lots of nudes on the walls, enormous nudes. And long, slow scenes (it’s a long, slow, movie) of ordinary people staring them down. Then, suddenly, the ordinary people are naked themselves, framed by the filmmaker and the screen—and we in the audience are compelled to gaze on them as they gaze on the paintings.

The scene is funny and uncomfortable, at first. In the dark of the theater, it takes its time, allows us—compels us, that is—to reflect: When are we attracted or repelled by nakedness? When is it beautiful and when is it artful, and when are they one and the same? And who decides—the creator? If so, how does he choose how much to reveal? For isn’t the act of choosing requisite to art? Beauty can be accidental, right? But if art isn’t contrived—conjured and made—then what’s to distinguish it from life? And if we’re determined to make the distinction—equally determined not to label the work a “fiction”—how, without undermining its value, to convince a reader that it’s true? The answer must have something to do with sound, cadence, voice. Music, after all, isn’t real or imagined: it’s music. That’s what it is.

*

Here comes that confession (she starts to disrobe): first, as with acting, I don’t write to disappear, but rather to locate myself. But wait—which self am I talking about? What a stunner to discover—to have to admit—I am not only or even essentially the mother, the wife, the teacher, the student, the neighbor, the friend, the actor, the writer—even as I have tended to write firsthand accounts out of those relationships and situations. But wait again: Don’t fiction writers use first-person narration? Don’t they break the fourth wall? But they’re writing in character, yes? As if I’m not? Of course I am. Does it make a difference—does it say anything about my state of undress that I’m telling you so? I’m certain it does.

With a nod to Vivian Gornick—who so well defined the difference between the situation and the story—let me insist that whoever I am, whichever self I bring to the page, for the purposes of this essay, the story is that I locate that best and most honest self—my frankly honed persona, I mean—through my voice.

And (she stands before you not-quite-naked) the other story, for now anyway, is that I’m not able to find that cadence—that willingness to sing out—as a writer of fiction.

Why not? Well, having to do with my friend’s intelligent daughter, and my other friend’s impervious husband, and with another writer, hugely successful, with whom I am only slightly acquainted.

Let’s say she’s a redhead.

Let’s say she has a husband and six kids and lives in a house on a hill.

Let’s say she writes fiction in first, second, and third, and many of her stories feature a woman with red hair and a husband and six children, and they all live in a house on a hill.

Let’s say these stories are full of lust and infidelity. In the stories, which are gorgeous and painful and embarrassing (they feel so true), the woman betrays her family again and again. Meanwhile the author—the real-life redhead—continues to live with the husband and their brood in that hilltop house.

Or what if she’s not a redhead? What if she’s a blond with a lover and two kids in a condo: but let’s say, though I hardly know her, I recognize a moment, an expression I’ve seen in her eyes, as described in the eyes of the redhead in the story. If I see it, surely her husband, her mother, her father, her friends, her children see it too, yes?

I have yet another writer friend—a colleague who claims that she always assumes that everyone makes up everything. But I don’t. That’s not what I assume. I want to think, after Colm Toibin, that a fiction writer uses what she needs and changes what she uses. How else to make me believe that her fictions are true?

So what I’m conceding? (she begins to turn—) I’m not willing to make you guess—Is she naked? Is that she? To boot, I only feel authentically present—that is, willing to fail, and fail again, and fail better—in one genre: nonfiction. And to clarify: it’s my intention not so much to expose myself (though I have, though I do, though I will) as to bust myself in that act and, in that way, to get closer and closer not only to what I think and what I know, but to the possibility of bumping up against the truth of what I didn’t believe I would ever understand. Me, too, Mr. Roth—I am who I don’t pretend to be.

Which is not to confess to a failure of imagination, oh no. Although possibly to a failure of nerve. To my desire to control, as best I can, your impression of me. Except I do so nakedly—I’m not convinced I could fool you otherwise. I don’t want to fool you, that isn’t my aim, not at all. I only want to sing for you, in the key of my choosing and as well as I know how.

5 Things Learned While Writing a Short Story

5 Things Learned While Writing a Short Story
Yesterday, I broke a years-long drought writing creative prose; I published a 5,000-word short story to my Tumblr. The last time I wrote anything similar, I did so in Microsoft Works, in 1999, when I completed the third and final part of a series of novellas I wrote for a middle school contest. I fell out of the habit once I entered high school and never came back to it, sticking largely to abstract poetry all the way through college and beyond.

Why did I come back? Because I realized that my avoidance of creative prose was due to a wall I had erected in my head, between “writing” and “creative writing.” Even as churned out tons of words for papers, blogs, and client websites, there as always some part of me telling me that that writing didn’t count and could not intersect with or influence my more artistic ambitions.

I was developing skills in producing writing that was done but not perfect, under deadlines, but whenever I sat down to write fiction, I immediately froze up, feeling like I had to write Ulysses or Madame Bovary. It was as if I was flipping off the writing switch whenever I wasn’t writing nonsense about gendering, cloud computing, or video games. It was maddening, plus the specter of the perfectionist Flaubert didn’t help.

Ultimately, I got over the hump by reading about programming. Paul Graham’s essay “The Power of the Marginal” helped me become much less self-conscious, dispelling a lot of the illusions I had about how “insiders” assess work from “outsiders.” It finally felt ok to write for whomever I wanted, rather than some mythical academy. Here’s what I learned along the way.

Reading is pre-gaming for writing
I mean that in two ways. Certainly, writing is like a plant that grows from the seeds of what the writer reads. More immediately, though, I find it hard to just to sit down and write without having a stack of books at my side to read before, during, and after I write.

Reading something – anything – before trying to type is not just helpful, but necessary in my experience. Even if it is comedic play read as I try to write taut Hemingway-style prose, digesting someone else’s great writing before trying to make your own is like feeling around in a toolbox while trying to build something. For example, I read lots of Aristophanes – Wealth, Birds – before writing my story. I don’t see the direct influence, but the reading helped on another level.

It can take hours to get “in the zone,” and sometimes you have to take a break
Very rarely can I just bang out prose that I’m comfortable with after immediately switching to it from some other task. I can’t just unfurl a good paragraph or poem right after exercising, and it’s a struggle to do so after playing a video game. This seamless multitasking seems mythical.

Instead, getting into a good zone requires one or both of the following:

Spending minutes or hours writing seemingly false starts: writing whatever is on my mind is a good way to clear the system and sometimes those ideas can be woven back into the eventual piece
Writing, encountering resistance, stepping away, and coming back: In another of Graham’s essay, he talks about how problems are often solved by returning to them later. Having time to walk (“All truly great thoughts are conceived by walking” – Nietzsche) and think is important, but your brain is also doing unconscious work for you, working out the kinks.
It’s fine – even preferable – to start in the middle
One of the most destructive tendencies in writing is trying to hammer out an epic introduction before even knowing what you’re writing about. This habit leads to overly broad introductory sentences (“Since the dawn of time, humankind has always liked ideas” or some such), plus it’s incredibly, incredibly constraining – it’s like you’re tying weights to your ankles before you even start the race!

Many aspects of the story I wrote only came into my mind in the act of writing – I did not, perhaps could not, conceive of them beforehand in the abstract. Starting in the middle or anywhere, using stream-of-consciousness if you have to, can be so much more productive than taking a strictly algorithmic approach to writing. On that note…

It’s hard not to be influenced by James Joyce
I once loathed Joyce, and I would never mention him as a favorite author. Yet, it is humbling to consider his influence. Almost any seemingly unstructured, free-form writing, chock-full of poetic sensibilities rather than just linear storytelling, owes a debt to Joyce. Reading Ulysses helped me chisel my way out of my years-long writer’s block, not because I liked it but because it refocused my mind on what tools were available to me as a writer, and showed me what could be done with them.

A Chromebook can help you stay focused
The Internet is terrible for focus. I mostly agree with this guy who can’t stay off IMDb when trying to write from his computer. While I haven’t faced this constant temptation while writing blog posts or technical writing, I can really feel it when attempting anything creative, perhaps since creative projects can be open-ended and make me feel like I can never read enough to prepare myself (when in fact my “reading” is just dicking around on Hacker News). So why/how did I write my story on a computer with an OS that is useless without an Internet connection?

Chromebooks, especially the Samsung ARM model from late 2012, are limited machines. Their limitations are part of their power and appeal, though. When using my Chromebook, I don’t have to deal with the vast, tangled mess of files on my MacBook, nor its ability to load webpages much more quickly than this ARM-powered laptop. I don’t keep as may tabs open and I don’t multitask (multitasking is bad for you overall, and a real killer for writers). I plan to write as much as I can from Chrome OS.

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Self Editing 4 Fiction ~ #2 Show AND Tell

Self Editing 4 Fiction ~ #2 Show AND Tell

Contrary to the “Show Don’t Tell” sound-bite circulating nowadays, the formula for creating an absorbing novel is a proportionate and pertinent blend of both of these elements – along with dialogue, which often shows and tells in its own right. The trick is to identify which portions of the story work well as scenes (showing) and which are served best by narrative (telling) and where to incorporate either of them in dialogue.

Now that The Great Gatsby is in the public domain we have a perfect opportunity to examine the example used by Browne & King. See below, an early draft from The Great Gatsby (courtesy Browne & King) that is in narrative style (telling):

“…The conversation was barely begun before I discovered that our host was more than simply a stranger to most of his guests. He was an enigma, a mystery. And this was a crowd that doted on mysteries. In the space of no more than five minutes, I heard several different people put forth their theories—all equally probable or preposterous—as to who and what he was. Each theory was argued with the kind of assurance that can only come from a lack of evidence, and it seemed that, for many of the guests, these arguments were the main reason to attend his parties…”

The narrative is smoothly written and conveys the enigmatic nature of the host of the party very well, but to immerse the reader effectively in a story we need to take advantage of scenes (showing) which reduces narrator intervention and caters for the style of media to which we have now become accustomed, such as movies and screenplays.
Now take a look at the final draft – the narrative exposition was converted to a scene:

… “I like to come,” Lucille said. “I never care what I do, so I always have a good time. When I was here last I tore my gown on a chair, and he asked me my name and address—inside of a week I got a package from Croirier’s with a new evening gown in it.”
“Did you keep it?” asked Jordan.
“Sure I did. I was going to wear it tonight, but it was too big in the bust and had to be altered. It was gas blue with lavender beads. Two hundred and sixty-five dollars.”
“There’s something funny about a fellow that’ll do a thing like that,” said the other girl eagerly. “He doesn’t want any trouble with anybody.”
“Who doesn’t?” I inquired.
“Gatsby. Somebody told me–”
The two girls and Jordan leaned together confidentially.
“Somebody told me they thought he killed a man once.” A thrill passed over all of us. The three Mr. Mumbles bent forward and listened eagerly.
“I don’t think it’s so much that,” argued Lucille skeptically; “it’s more that he was a German spy during the war.”
One of the men nodded in confirmation.
“I heard that from a man who knew all about him, grew up with him in Germany,” he assured us positively.
“Oh, no,” said the first girl, “it couldn’t be that, because he was in the American army during the war.” As our credulity switched back to her she leaned forward with enthusiasm. “You look at him sometimes when he thinks nobody’s looking at him. I’ll bet he killed a man.” …

As you can see, adopting the scene approach here immerses the reader more, who is now inside the story rather that looking down on it from the narrator’s point of view. There is still an element of ‘telling’ in the scene, some useful and some otherwise:

Adverb telling:
said the other girl eagerly
argued Lucille skeptically (tautological)
leaned together confidentially
The three Mr. Mumbles bent forward and listened eagerly (2nd use of eagerly!).

he assured us positively (is there any other way?)

I have no beef with adverbs but if you need to attach one to convey the tone of your dialogue, then you really need to go back and rewrite, so it stands alone without an adverb (The above scene does not need them at all). The (modern) reader can feel patronized if you spell out the obvious with adverbs and explanations.

Narrative telling:
“…A thrill passed over all of us…”

Used sparingly, this kind of exposition adds spice to a scene and, if well done, slips under the narrative radar.

When to tell:
Although scenes are hugely important, there are times when the flow of the story is best served by narrative; sometimes a summary works better, especially with bit-part players or when we are placing plot importance on a following scene. For example, if the story involves a secondary character who gets injured but his main objective is to occupy an upcoming scene in a hospital ward with a main character, you would most likely be best served by introducing him and his misfortune in narrative exposition, then reveal more about him when you get to the scene he inhabits. Or perhaps your MC is an athlete who takes part in a series of knockout stages: most of the early races would likely be best served by narrative summary, which will be a backdrop to the sizzling final bouts of the contest. Think ‘proportion’ in these instances.
Plus, don’t get hung up on ‘telling’ – it’s a vital part of any storyline. If a passage of pure exposition is required to help the flow and comprehension of the novel, then so be it.

More pointers on showing:
First off: never be afraid to drop the reader into a scene in which they have to fend for themselves – give the reader credit for having a brain; if your scenes require explanation, then that is where you need to apply TLC, not by explaining the scene with a narrative intro. Readers are used to encountering new scenes in real life, such as being introduced to new people and/or activities/environments – it is our nature to ‘wing it’ and catch up as things unfold.

Milking a scene:
Below is an example of a scene that throws light on the MC, his car and his passenger – and isn’t afraid to ‘tell’ a snippet or two in the process. I’m going to throw you into this scene halfway through. You will notice that the very first sentence places the time of day:

Ernesto inspected the bank of warning lights reflecting off Al’s face. “Your gas gauge says empty,” he observed.
“Yeah. Been like that for a while. It’s broken,” Al explained. “I put some gas in before I picked you up. We’re golden.”
Ernesto tried again. “Aren’t you worried about all the hazard lights being on? Like the check engine light?”
“Nah. Those are just to let you know the manufacturer wants you to pay the dealer a bunch of money to verify everything’s working. I know everything’s working – if it wasn’t, we wouldn’t be moving right now…” Al’s brand of logic was unassailable.
Ernesto changed his opinion of Al. He modified his internal evaluation of Al from idiot to sub-custodial mouth-breather. He just prayed they would make it to the rendezvous point so he’d never have to see the cretin again.
Unfortunately for Ernesto, tonight wasn’t the night for prayers to be answered. At least, not his. A loud clunk and a series of shuddering slamming sounds came from the engine compartment, followed by silence, other than the motor running and the tires on the pavement.
“What the hell was that?” Ernesto asked.
“Dunno. Never done that before,” Al observed. “But hey, she’s running like a scared rabbit, so no worries.”
Which was true, until after a few minutes they both began to notice that the road was getting darker. The dimming headlights were soon barely illuminating the pavement. Al uttered an oath and pulled to the side of the road – in this case, the muddy shoulder.

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Self editing 4 fiction #8 Master of the Beat

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Self editing 4 fiction #8 Master of the Beat

Beats are those small pieces of action within scenes and dialogue that help the reader to identify with the scene.

They balance the narrative and dialogue, and inform the reader about the actors’ traits etc. – they are also used in place of speaker attributes quite a lot:

“I didn’t mean to upset you, honestly,” Roger said as he gently took my hand.

can become:

Roger took my hand. “ I didn’t mean to upset you, honestly…”

Useful though these beats are for speaker attributes and to season the narrative, we must make sure we don’t “do them to death” and/or echo them overtly. Here are a few popular beats that come into this category:

raised his brows
frowned
shrugged
chuckled
sighed
cleared her throat
nodded
shook his head
walked over to the window
looked out the window
looked up
looked down
stared into the distance
scratched his chin
steepled her fingers

You get the idea… So we should always be on the lookout for echoes when using beats; one of the biggest culprits is ‘nodded’ – try doing a search for this word (and others) when you’re editing, and don’t be surprised when you find characters nodding all over the place and in painful proximity. To initiate a “Beat” search in MS Word, press the F5 key and select “More” > “Reading Highlight” > “Highlight All” or to navigate them one by one, select “Find Next”.

Try to inject a bit of originality with your beats – to find inspiration, engage in a bit of “people watching” or take in a movie with an eye out for mannerisms and how you can coin them.

But even with clever, appropriate and original beats, we must ensure we don’t clog the narrative with them and disturb the flow of the narrative or erode the tension within the dialogue.

One of my favourite examples of how an edit can rack up the tension in a scene is from one of my favourite self-editing books – the timeless and priceless Self Editing for Fiction Writers by Renni Browne and Dave King (purchase HERE). Below is an example of an early draft of Fran Dorf’s A Reasonable Madness followed by the final edit:

[…

“Laura’s illness is very complex,” I said. “If you’d just–”

“My wife obviously has a screw loose somewhere,” he said. “I was under the impression that the family is informed when a person goes crazy.”

I sighed. “Sometimes that’s true,” I admitted.

He said, “But you don’t think my wife is crazy, or what?”

My frustration was mounting. “I wish you’d stop throwing that word around so casually,” I snapped.

“I don’t give a goddamn what you wish,” he said. “It’s obvious to me that my wife should be in an asylum.”

What an odd choice of words, I thought. “There are no asylums any more, Mr. Wade,” I pointed out.

He got up, walked over to the window and looked out, then turned back to me.
“Whatever,” he said. “A hospital, then.”
I took off my glasses, rubbed my eyes. “Why do you think she should be in a hospital?” I asked him.
“Delusions. You’ve heard of them?”
“Once or twice.” I said sarcastically, beginning to lose it. “Why don’t you tell me about Laura’s?”
“Thinking things that are obviously ridiculous,” he said. “Misinterpreting everyday events and people’s behavior as having something to do with her-with this power she thinks she has. Oh, but I forgot. You believe in witches.”

Now take a look at the passage as finally edited:

“Laura’s illness is very complex. If you’d–”
“My wife obviously has a screw loose somewhere,” he said. “I was under the impression that the family is informed when a person goes crazy.”
“Well, yes,” I said, “but–”
“But you don’t think my wife is crazy, or what?”
“I wish you’d stop throwing that word around.”
“I don’t give a goddamn what you wish. It’s obvious to me that my wife belongs in an asylum.”
An asylum?
“There are no asylums any more, Mr. Wade.”
“A hospital, then. Whatever.”
I took off my glasses, rubbed my eyes. “Why do you think Laura belongs in a hospital?”
“Delusions. You’ve heard of them?”
“Why don’t you tell me what you think those are, Mr. Wade.”
“Thinking things that are obviously ridiculous,” he said. “Misinterpreting everyday events and people’s behavior as having something to do with her-with this power she thinks she has. Oh, but I forgot. You believe in witches.”
…]

As can be seen, per our earlier article on dialogue, we have lost the unrequired speaker attributes (I said, he said, I admitted, I snapped, I pointed out, he said, I asked him, I said sarcastically). The fewer interruptions help with the dialogue flow, but, more importantly, we have fewer beats and the main character is no longer telling us his frustration was mounting (which is obvious) and the thought attribute (what an odd choice of words, I thought) is now gone – replaced by the succinct An asylum? in interior monologue style.
Better still, Mr. Wade no longer takes the hackneyed trip to the window to look out of it and the main character’s early sigh is removed and followed by more natural dialogue and Mr. Wade’s interruption, which goes a long way to creating the crackling tension in the scene.

To conclude, there is no finite formula for how many beats to put in a scene, but beware of inserting a detailed running commentary if an actor is performing a task during the scene – allow the reader to exercise their imagination to fill in the gaps. Beats are useful to inject pauses in a long dialogue exchange (if used sparingly) and to slow the narrative flow to give the reader a break from relentless narrative action. It goes without saying that beats can help to define your characters – be they nervous, belligerent, confident, arrogant, clumsy etc. Try to avoid, or at least be frugal with, common, clichéd beats – especially involving “look” – look, looked, looking is one of the most overused triplets in novel writing. If you don’t believe me, do an F5 search for “look” in your MS and see for yourself…

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Story #2

Here is my second installation of my book, as mentioned before this is an unedited draft. Please read and let me know what you think, thanks for reading.

Now trying to plan every kind of scenario, that would and could happen at the Inner Harbor, and not exactly knowing what they were dealing with. The only idea that Chris had was that if anything was to happen and they either one of them. That Melissa was going to have a recording of the conversation between the two of them, for both of them to listen to later. Cause really this is Chris, and Melissa’s lives that are in danger here, mostly Melissa’s and her daughters. But Chris wouldn’t know what to do with himself if anything was to happen to Melissa, or her daughter. So after hours, and hours of preparation they believed that they were ready for this. For Chris this was very hard for him not to let Melissa know of anything that had happened to him previously to him. So the day had arrived for Chris and Melissa to go to the Inner Harbor to meet this mysterious stranger at the Inner Harbor. So Chris had splitted up from Melissa. Before Chris had left Melissa he gave her a very passionate kiss, and hoping that this was not the last one for either one of them. So they had splitted up, Chris had ran quickly across the street to the hotel, and to get a good seat for everything to happen. So while Chris was trying to find a spot to see everything from the hotel window from the highest floor that was in the hotel with the best view of the Inner Harbor. Now at this time the scene was a warm September weekend. The Inner Harbor was pretty busy with both of stadiums (Orioles Park at Candem Yards, Ravens stadium Aka M & T Bank stadium) both stadiums that day both the Baltimore Orioles, and the Baltimore Ravens were getting ready to play. The Orioles were goin to play at 2:00 that afternoon, and the ravens later on that at evening around 7:00  or so. But either way the whole area around the Inner Harbor was very busy. People coming and goin throughout the day in this hotel. So it was very busy for Chris to get up to the area where he was goin to be watching over Melissa. With all that going on Chris finally did reach his destination within the hotel. And as he feared, by the time that he had reached the floor, and the window. She was gone, scared to death Chris had ran through the hotel trying to get out as fast as he could. He finally gets out frantic, frightened, he doesn’t know what to do with himself. So he stands in place for a moment, to look around and see that he didn’t overlook anything. After 3 to 4 hours of looking and finally losing hope that she was nowhere to be found in the Inner Harbor. Now with Chris is feeling a lot of emotions right now, and again doesn’t know what to do with himself. He feels like he is paralyzed, and can’t move at all. So after a while of going through all these emotions he felt like it was all his fault. Mostly by not letting Melissa know what she was walking into. So after coming to his senses some what. He had called Erica (Melissa’s best friend in college) to see where was Jennifer (Melissa’s Daughter). Chris had found out from Erica that Jennifer had went on a  trip to Melissa’s mother’s house. And would be staying there for a while, not knowing that Melissa had sent Jennifer to her mother’s house, not knowing what was going to happen at The Inner Harbor today. So Chris had a sie of relief that Jennifer was temporarily out of danger. But also knows that before to long no one would be able to run away from this at all. So after going home and drinking himself to sleep. Chris had a very malicious dream about him trying to save Melissa and failing and losing her forever. So after waking soaked from it, he had to jump in the shower to get himself cleaned up. But he also knows that now he can’t be alone anymore cause he is then he wouldn’t know what he would do. So he calls his boy John (John Swoo, best friend from high school, and college) and John had asked Chris if he wanted to go with himself, and Kelly (John’s sister) to their family’s house for a family dinner. So knowing that he wanted to be around people that he knows, and friendly people at that.  John had went to dinner at John’s parents house. At the house were John’s parents: Thomas, Elle Swoo. They had always loved Chris, they had considered as a great friend to John, and Kelly.

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